Failing to write

I am failing to write anything that I can live with to either of the Windsors tracks, despite listening to the music on my headphones on the walk to work.

I may have to confess that I can't add any decent vocals to these tunes. Wouldn't this be better than ploughing ahead and offering something I don't feel is right?

Usually I don't give up easily, but part of being an experienced as an artist is that you hope you have learnt to be selective in how you spend your creative time. And if something really isn't working I am probably better off pursuing something else. At least for a while.

I wonder if I will ever return to these tracks though, I really think my vocals wouldn't be right on either tune.

Songs about electricity

My good friend Jim has revealed to me that electricity is a subject that I have returned to three times in song. Each piece explores an aspect of the mystical compulsion exerted by this miraculous power.

Electric Bell (To America)
John Wesley and his Electrification Health Machine (with Bryan Causton)
Tram 41

Tramcar 41

Ah, the final lyrical piece has arrived this morning and the secret of the song is suddenly revealed.


Where are they going,
where were they from,

passengers electrified
on tramcar 41?

How to punctuate these lines causes me a bit of a dilemma - the above version makes the most grammatical sense - but the below makes more song sense:-


Where are they going,
where were they from?

Passengers electrified
on tramcar 41.

Anyone got any thoughts on punctuation when writing out lyrics as opposed to poetry?